Critical Decision

I won't criticize the writing since the other comments seem to do that better than I could, but I enjoyed the overall mood and art style!

I would have liked some kind of conclusion, though

I find it surprising to take a decision for a character without having its point of view. Especially when most of the stories is made of suppositions from another character, and a kinda excessive reaction from her? That being said I don't know at all Nuvvu Nenu Prema, and I'm well aware that my European culture might biase my reading of the story. Still, with the lack of context, the final choice felt a bit cheap. If the relation between the two is just resumed by "being faithful" or "having fun", well, whatever the choice it just seems emtpy and meaningless.

Okay, that being said, I don't want to be too harsh! I enjoyed a bit the game, for its artstyle that is pretty great, and its rhythm that makes the story and the dialog evolve in a good pace. I wasn't able to hear any sound, was it removed in the last update after the feedback one the volume? Also, showing the percentage of players' actions is a nice touch, although I would have like to have a proper conclusion to the story as well.

Anyway, writing short and impactful story is a had execice! And while I had my critics, well, it still achieves to presents characters, conflicts, and almost a resolution, in a very short amount of time. So I hope you'll keep working on this style of storytelling! :)

Please don’t submit this to jams without respect for the rules of the jam. Thanks

woah that was petty good ^_^

Ok, as a screenwriter and filmmaker I will say the story needs revision. There is absolutely no character arches. It felt WAY more plot driven than character driven. I would focus on developing the characters as people and not placeholders for a plot-point. I think it would be a more emotional moment for the player if you build a connection with the wife a bit more. It just seemed too hollow.

Story aside, the game itself is good. I like the artwork and music but more branch narrative choices would've been great as well.

I also like the use of percentages to show how many made the moral decision or not. Overall good job. Just work on story structure a bit more.

Interesting. The music was loud. The story is...interesting. I was certain she was going to go crazy and kill him & the ex-girlfriend. The way she comes to conclusions about "his desires" seems like the ramblings of either 1) a psychotic break down or 2) An anxious mess. The first scenario seems to fit the narrative more as someone with really low self-esteem and really high anxiety wouldn't try to hook them up I don't think. I think the psycho would go find the ex and make them be together. Overall the narrative is a bit too forward. Is it trying to make you feel bad? Idk. Either way, it wasn't bad. A little cringy though. sorry. A few notes:

• The art and music were great! I wish there had been more decision making throughout though. I think you could have gotten away with the story if you let the reader/player choose the way to feel about the memory
• Was too short, and the text was a bit slow. Would have been nice to have a "fast forward" button so that I wouldn't have to wait for the text to print out.

music is absolutely too loud. As far as the story, I feel like the pacing is extremely quick. We don't really get a chance to empathize with the character, they're just some woman who was a husband still in love with their ex. It makes no sense to invite the ex over, the two should just talk it out. Very confusing.

best sonic fan game I ever played

The best game ever, this game is going to win the GOTY

Really good game